Uneasy

This short story was written for the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge, which invites writers to interact with one another through weekly photo prompts. My word count for this piece is at 175. Enjoy!


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Credit: J. S. Brand

With each step I take, my feelings of unease seem to triple. I’ve walked this path a thousand times before, rushed through its thickets and meadows, but something’s different now. As I tread its familiar stones, my hairs stand on end and my hands grow pale and clammy.

It’s not the feeling of being watched – that’s an inaccurate clique – it’s the feeling of something being not quite right. The birds aren’t singing like they’re meant to, and the crickets and grasshoppers are strangely silent. It’s almost as if the animals have been hushed quiet by some silent, unknowable force.

I reach the top of the hill and look forward, heart racing. There’s something lying across my path, dark and unfamiliar. I want to run, but my legs no longer seem capable. Then, staring hard at the shadow, a jolt of realisation shoots through me. I didn’t recognise it at first because someone’s cut off its antlers, but, there it is. The king of the forest – a white stag – the bullet wound shining in its chest.


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17 Comments Add yours

    1. Very sad, but also, unfortunately, very honest 😦

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  1. Great story! This is how I feel when someone shoots one of those beautiful animals! I want to remind you that the word limit is 75-175 words.

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    1. It’s so horrible! 😦 thanks, this one should be at 175?

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      1. Oh,, okay! If it is, no problem! It just seemed longer to me.

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      2. Ah I see, I always write my stories on Microsoft word and double check the word counts so it should be okay, but thanks for checking – it is only just in the line, after all! 🙂

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      3. Thank you! I really appreciate that!

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  2. Michael says:

    Hi Emily,
    I thought you captured those feelings so very well.

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    1. Thanks so much, Michael! And thanks for reading, too 🙂

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Great atmosphere and a sad find. Wonderful stuff.

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    1. Thanks for reading! 🙂

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  4. This made for a great read. You set the tone perfectly.

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    1. Thank you!! Glad you enjoyed reading it 🙂

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  5. This is one of my favorite responses so far! Well done, beautifully crafted. And poor stag. 😦

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    1. Thank you so much; I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  6. Enkin Anthem says:

    Wonderful atmosphere and imagery.

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