A Private Bay

This short story was written for the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge, which invites writers to interact with one another through weekly photo prompts. My word count for this piece is at 172. Enjoy!

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Credit: The Storyteller’s Abode

It’s not particularly unusual to catch the glimpse of a boat or two as they cruise past the bay. Yet this one, this sturdy little sailing boat, catches my eye. The bay isn’t far from the harbour so most boats that pass, power through the water towards it, their skippers barely sparing a glance for my private, little bay. This skipper, though, seems to stare right at me as he angles the boat towards the sand and docks right there, on the beach.

I rise to my feet, hesitating. I’m tempted to go down there and tell him about the harbour barely a mile off, but, for some reason, I can’t make myself do it. I can only watch him as he unloads his cargo, wondering what to do.

I’ve only just come to the conclusion that I should leave him to his work, when a sound makes me look round. The man is unloading bigger packages from the boat now – misshapen packages that wriggle about and scream whenever he kicks them.


Word Count: 172

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25 Comments Add yours

  1. Sight11 says:

    Hmm.. It’s strange we took a different route on this one.. Maybe we are crazy.. Hmm.. Scary event.. Stellar post..

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    1. It is very strange where our minds went!! Thanks for reading and commenting 🙂

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  2. James McEwan says:

    I like the slow build up of the mystery, the subdued threat of intrusion and then the tension that accumulates in an horrific train of thoughts. Whatever are in the packages means trouble.

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    1. Thank you so much. I think a big part of seeing such a horrific thing is dealing with your own thoughts/shock – glad this came across.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Scary thing to see, and if she doesn’t get out of there he may come for her too – can’t have a witness! Good one.

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    1. Thanks, Iain! That’s a good point – I hadn’t thought of that!

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  4. Moon says:

    Oh my God! I wonder what he is going to do to them. Terribly scary.
    Great story , Emily.

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    1. Thanks so much, Moon! Glad you enjoyed it 🙂


  5. Fluid Phrase says:

    A nice surprise ending there. Caught me off guard. Very well written.

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    1. Thanks very much for stopping by and commenting! I’m glad it came across as a bit of a twist!!

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  6. Varad says:

    Very scary circumstances here, Emily. Hope she’s actually Wonder Woman who’ll end up kicking the creep out of her island.

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    1. Haha that would be a good twist! Thanks for reading, Varad 🙂

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  7. Chilling story! The packages are live humans. Makes me wonder what he is going to do with them? I think she better run! Great story!

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    1. I think she better do, too! Thanks so much!

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  8. Nice story! I enjoyed the suspense and intrigue in the story!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by! Glad you enjoyed it 🙂


  9. Michael says:

    Loved the ending Emily, isn’t it wonderful when our imagination takes over and we go places we might not normally go….great tale with possibilities.

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    1. I think that’s the great thing about writing prompts – such strange things come to mind! Thanks for reading, Michael.

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  10. Scary story. Good wowrk!

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  11. Sandi says:

    Maybe the packages aren’t human, but more like those screaming BULB plant thingys on Harry Potter! Perhaps it’s a top-secret science. Either way, best to keep quiet and just watch. The plants might escape and end up eating the man. You don’t want to alert them to your presence. Sci-fi movie waiting right here.


  12. athling2001 says:

    Danger!!! Hope things work out. Great job.

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  13. luckyjc007 says:

    Great suspense and feeds the imagination! I hope she is wise enough to not hang around. Whatever happens when he comes can not be good!

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  14. Goodness me! Only God knows what nefarious activities he’s up to. Is it puppies, humans, what?

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    1. That’s the question haha! The mystery is all a part of it 🙂 Thanks for reading and commenting.

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