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This short piece of creative writing is for the purposes of the competition at Friday Fictioneers, the task being to compose a story, based on the given photo prompt, in 100 words or less (my word count: 100). Enjoy!


Dale Rogerson
Credit: Dale Rogerson

I’m fed up with boxes. I’m fed up with their sticky labels dogeared corners.

At first, they excited me; whenever I looked at them, I saw hope. I was going to get out of this dingy, old flat and escape to the city, where I would finally be able to be myself. Now, though, all I feel is pain.

This town of mine, this strange, little town… it’s my home. I hadn’t really appreciated that before – not until today, my last day. I stare hard at the flowers on the kitchen table – at my last bit of home.


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37 Comments Add yours

  1. Moon says:

    It happens all the time . Don’t know why , it’s like we are programmed to wait until the goodbye to appreciate a person’s or thing’s worth. You have captured the emotion really well .

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  2. Moon says:

    Happens all too often. We don’t appreciate the worth until it’s time to say goodbye. You have captured the narrator’s emotions really well.🙂

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    1. Thank you so much! I agree.. it’s such a sad thing.

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  3. Ellora says:

    Lovely piece of writing – really thoughtful 🙂

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  4. Jelli says:

    I fear the day I will have to move, now. We just got some ‘real’ furniture. Now, it’s not a ‘pack up the car and go’ anymore. Pretty scary. Loved the story.

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    1. Aw, I’m sure it’ll be okay, even with ‘real’ furniture you can move! Glad you enjoyed the story 🙂

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  5. Alice Audrey says:

    It’s so much easier to leave if you don’t look back.

    Great story. Come see mine here.

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    1. Very true, shame that’s sometimes hard, though

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    We grow so attached to the places we stay in, especially where we have grown up. Nice take, felt very real.

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    1. Very true, Iain! Thank you so much for your kind words 🙂

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  7. Dale says:

    As one who has been living in boxes and dreading the day I have to repack to move… but at the same time cannot wait…

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    1. Sounds about right! Thanks for reading

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  8. Dear Emily,

    I felt her apprehension. Sometimes the miserable known feels safer than the unknown. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. granonine says:

    I felt the emotion. Well-written.

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  10. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    That last line was a heart breaker. Well done.

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    1. Thanks so much – glad the emotion came across.

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  11. This writing is quite poetic in a way. There’s something in people that resists change but it’s usually overpowered by our desire for new adventures.🙄

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    1. Very true, an eternal struggle perhaps! Thanks so much for reading and commenting 🙂

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  12. So often we imagine the grass to be greener on the other side. I know, I’ve made that mistake myself!. A beautifully composed piece.

    `Click to read my FriFic

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    1. Thanks, Keith!! It’s just part of human nature, I think – no fault of your own.

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  13. Miles Rost says:

    I will feel this whenever I finally leave Korea and go to where I am to go next. Korea holds a very special place…it is my home.

    Well done!

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    1. Thank you, glad you can relate!

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  14. The angst and the desolution came through very well. Nice!

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    1. Thank you so much! 🙂

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  15. Very palpable emotion. Wonderfully done.

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  16. Better the devil we know. I felt your character’s apprehension. Next to marriage (and divorcse) moving home is the most emotionally traumatic time we can feel. Nicely portrayed.

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    1. Thank you! Having just moved into my first flat I thought it was pretty relevant.

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  17. gahlearner says:

    That’s beautiful. Without endings, there can be no new beginnings, and hindsight is often deceptive.

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    1. Thank you so much for your lovely words! This is very true – no matter how much we want them, we won’t get any beginnings without a few endings! Thanks for reading.

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  18. erkendrich says:

    Reblogged this on Diary of a would-be novelist and commented:
    Mixed emotions are beautifully portrayed in this simple but evocative piece of writing.

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  19. Such a raw and honest emotion. and you put it to words, way to go!

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    1. Emily says:

      Thank you so much 🙂

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